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A Farewell to Arms on Heavy Bored Podcast

My discussion about Ernest Hemingway’s A Farewell to Arms with Andrew Wittstadt on the Heavy Bored Podcast

What does it mean for a work of literature to be universal? In the Ken Burns and Lynn Novick documentary, The Vietnam War, there is an interview with a female North Vietnamese soldier. Before she left home to serve the communist cause, her parents gave her a copy of A Farewell to Arms. She helped to build the Ho Chi Minh Trail, the illicit road through Cambodia and Laos that brought armaments to the Viet Cong in the south. At night, when the work was done, the road she had just built would be bombed by the Americans. While she was huddling in a trench, waiting out the bombardment, she would read A Farewell to Arms. She said the novel connected her to all the soldiers in history who ever suffered in war.

Join Andrew and I as we discuss Hemingway as a universal writer, a white male writer, an anti-war writer, and more.

If you can’t get enough Hemingway, be sure to also check out my Three Writing Prompts Inspired by Hemingway.

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Character Development 101: Tips for Unforgettable Protagonists

A great story is defined by its characters. But developing characters that feel like real people is not easy, and it’s one of the aspects of story writing that my students ask me about the most.

Advice for beginner writers often suggests making a list of your character’s favorite food, color and hobbies, along with a list of physical traits like hair and eye color. But think for a moment about your best friend or a beloved family member. What is the first thing that comes to mind when you think of that person? It’s probably not their brown eyes or their stamp collection. Maybe it’s their sense of humor, maybe it’s the way they show their love with big elaborate dinners, maybe it’s the fact that they always pick up the phone when you call, no matter what. But regardless, these are all traits that are hard to capture in a list or even a paragraph of exposition. Instead, I always suggest to my students that they develop their characters by working in scenes.

Below are some writing prompts that will help you develop your character by putting them in a situation where a reader can see how your character acts in real time, rather than a simple list or paragraph of description. Not all of these will produce final draft material, but they will help you learn more about your character so you can strengthen the story that you want to write.

Save the Cat

A character’s moral compass is among their most important traits. First of all, it tells the readers whether they should love, hate or love to hate this particular character. The way the character handles moral choices early on also creates foreshadowing for how the main character will resolve the central conflict.

The screenwriting book Save The Cat! The Last Book on Screenwriting You’ll Ever Need by Blake Snyder offers this advice: have your hero “save the cat” to engage your audience emotionally and make them root for the protagonist. It’s a shorthand trick for writers to get viewers to bond with the main character right away.

What does it mean to “Save the Cat”? A “Save the Cat” moment refers to any scene that makes the audience care about the protagonist by showing their noble, likable qualities. For instance, in the first chapter of The Hunger Games, Katniss volunteers to participate in a fight to the death in order to save her sister. The film Die Hard begins with Bruce Willis’s character bringing a teddy bear home for his son, revealing his soft, decent side before the action begins.

Alternatively, an anti-hero or villain might kick off the story by “killing the cat,” or doing something that makes them immediately unlikeable. In Charles Dicken’s classic “A Christmas Carol,” the story begins with Ebenezer Scrooge fervently turning down an invitation to celebrate Christmas with his nephew, calling the holiday a “humbug.” He then refuses to donate to a charity for the poor and only reluctantly allows his overworked assistant the day off for Christmas. Thus, his miserly, bitter character traits are well-established before the inciting incident of the story, the appearance of the first ghost.

Writing Exercise

Write a scene introducing your character. What is a simple way that you can show their ethical qualities? Whether it is showing generosity to a stranger or stealing a car for joyriding, the character’s first moral choice of the story will show the reader the inner workings of their heart.

The Moral Dilemma

As your story progresses, your character should continue to face difficult ethical decisions. When we think of what a story is “about,” we often think of the external conflict first. For instance, when we think of Jaws, we think about a town being terrorized by a killer shark, and the men who have to stop it. But a good story never simply has one external conflict. Your main character always should be wrestling with an internal dilemma that intersects with the external conflict. In Jaws, police chief Brody suffers from a fear of water. He’s also morally passive, allowing the mayor to bully him into reopening the beaches despite his own instinct that it’s not safe. To resolve the external conflict, he must overcome both of his internal obstacles: he must become a leader who takes decisive action, which also involves facing his fear of water by hunting the shark.

The stories that stay with us the most are stories where the main character is forced to make a moral stance in the face of ambiguous or incomplete information. In Hamlet, the titular hero struggles with whether or not to kill his uncle Claudius, who has murdered Hamlet’s father and married his mother. The ghost of Hamlet’s father appears in the first act and asks his son to avenge his murder. The bookish Hamlet is reluctant to act in part because he cannot be sure that his uncle killed his father. He has the word of a ghost, who in his view could just as easily be an agent of hell sent to deceive him rather than his father asking for vengeance. Yet he feels he is obligated to act due to his society’s views on masculinity and filial duty.

It takes Hamlet the length of the four-hour play to resolve the story’s conflict, and in the meantime we see different sides of his personality emerge:

  • Philosophic – Hamlet deeply contemplates ethics, divinity, justice and morality when deliberating action. His philosophical nature is revealed through his solitary musings.
  • Melancholic – The weight of his dilemma fuels Hamlet’s depressive tendencies, making him increasingly morose as he struggles with the decision.
  • Idealistic – His values of honor, justice and morality conflict with the reality of revenge. He agonizes over preserving his ideals.
  • Suspicious – Not fully trusting the ghost, Hamlet suspects deception which affects his response. His distrustful side emerges.
  • Passionate – When stirred by rage, grief, or betrayal, Hamlet’s passions boil over, spurring him to lash out verbally and physically.
  • Witty – Hamlet can never resist verbal sparring matches. Wit becomes his weapon and shield.
  • Indecisive – Caught between competing imperatives, Hamlet wavers on the edge of action. Indecision defines his response.
  • Impulsive – He acts rashly at times when emotions overwhelm reason, revealed in outbursts and confrontations.

Facing the moral dilemma brings out all aspects of Hamlet’s personality: his virtues, flaws and inner turmoil. We see his multifaceted nature emerge under pressure.

Without moral dilemmas, a plot is merely a series of meaningless actions. By putting characters into situations where right and wrong are complicated, moral dilemmas become powerful sources of story conflict, tension, and insight into the human condition.

Writing Exercise

What is your main character’s biggest moral dilemma? Spend a few minutes brainstorming three different ways that moral dilemma could be resolved, and how each one would bring out different traits in your character.

The Argument

By their nature, moral dilemmas involve conflict between characters. Whenever two characters disagree or are in tension with one another, it highlights the differences between them. However, not all arguments need to be a high-stakes debate about the ethics of using nuclear weapons. Lovers might tease each other. Friends might have goofy debates (Is a hot dog a sandwich?). All forms of argument, from the joking to the mundane to the morally imperative, reveal layers in our characters.

Too often in beginner fiction, I see dialogue that looks like this:

“Hi, David, how are you today?”

“I’m alright.”

“Enjoying the nice weather?”

“Yes, it’s great the sun is finally out.”

Not only is this incredibly boring, it doesn’t say anything about the characters. There’s no conflict, no tension, no disagreement. Let’s try this again but with a slight twist.

“Oh, it’s you, David. How’s it going?”

“You’re pretending to care all of a sudden. Never asked me before.”

“Nevermind. Nice weather, at least.”

“Yeah, that blasted sun finally decided to show its face.”

While the characters are still making small talk, there’s an oppositional dynamic that raises questions about the characters’ history. By disagreeing, the characters seem more vivid and full of personality, thus making the reader care more about what’s going to happen next.

Some of the most famous love stories in literature, such as Elizabeth Bennet and Mr. Darcy in Pride and Prejudice or Beatrice and Benedick in Much Ado About Nothing, are characterized by the witty arguments between the heroes before they fall in love. Here is a repartee from the first scene of Much Ado About Nothing.

BEATRICE

I wonder that you will still be talking, Signior
Benedick: nobody marks you.

BENEDICK

What, my dear Lady Disdain! are you yet living?

BEATRICE

Is it possible disdain should die while she hath
such meet food to feed it as Signior Benedick?
Courtesy itself must convert to disdain, if you come
in her presence.

BENEDICK

Then is courtesy a turncoat. But it is certain I
am loved of all ladies, only you excepted: and I
would I could find in my heart that I had not a hard
heart; for, truly, I love none.

BEATRICE

A dear happiness to women: they would else have
been troubled with a pernicious suitor. I thank God
and my cold blood, I am of your humour for that: I
had rather hear my dog bark at a crow than a man
swear he loves me.

We get a taste here of the sense of humor of each character, especially Beatrice’s love of wordplay. And despite the hostility between them, we see how they are alike: both are proud and have sworn off romance, thus foreshadowing that the pair have more in common than they think.

Writing Exercise

A little disagreement can make an otherwise boring, expository scene lively and engaging. Try writing a scene where one character is trying to convey some important backstory to another character, who either isn’t listening or keeps interrupting. How does the first character express their anger? Why does the second character have trouble listening? Is it because they are daydreaming, being a smart-aleck, or something else? Your answers will help develop your characters.

Love

Relationships between characters need more than just conflict though. There’s one thing that I see lacking in many otherwise well-written stories in literary journals these days: genuine bonds between characters.

Relationships are at the heart of all stories. Some may center on a star-crossed romance, others a friendship blossoming under unlikely circumstances, or a parent and child with a difficult relationship coming to a new understanding. The clashing personalities and arguments that arise in any relationship—whether romantic, platonic, or filial—cannot be ignored, but love still ought to be at the heart of it.

Of course, there are exceptions. I’m not saying that you can’t write the next American Psycho if your main interest is exploring alienation or the mind of a sociopath. But if you’re writing say, a story about a marriage falling apart, I want to know why brought the couple together in the first place, not necessarily in a flashback, but in the little details of their interactions that hint at their shared history. If you’re writing about an adult child who has a difficult relationship with their parents, I don’t want the child’s resentments, however legitimate, to override the parent’s humanity.

I keep seeing these contemporary short stories where the main character is a perfect angel and the people closest to her are all terrible. Her mother, her father, her siblings, and her spouse, are all irredeemable. A story like that isn’t revealing any new insights into the human condition. Instead exploring both sides in a complicated relationship will interest the reader and make them want to read until the resolution.

Eugene O’Neill’s A Long Day’s Journey Into Night, is an autobiographical play dramatizing the conflicts of a family of actors. The story was so personal, O’Neill only wanted it published after his death. His stand-in, Edmund, has many reasons for resenting his father. He is miserly to the point of insisting on treating Edmund’s tuberculosis at the cheapest hospital possible. He’s squandered all the family money on property. And Edmund sees his father as responsible for his mother’s morphine addiction, as his acting career kept her isolated and unable to fulfill her own dreams. But by the end of the play, Edmund’s father opens up about his remorse for his failings as a father, and the two bond over their shared love of literature.

Writing Exercise

Choose two of your characters who are at odds, yet have a close relationship. Perhaps they are blood relatives. Perhaps they are stuck in the same environment, such as roommates in a boarding school or co-workers on a space station. They didn’t choose to be close, and the differences in their personalities make the proximity difficult. Describe a moment where your point-of-view character sees the other at their most vulnerable. How does this affect how they perceive the other?

Point of View Shift

This last tip is for when you are struggling to develop a secondary character. While your story should have a consistent point of view of your choice, it can be helpful when developing your ideas to play around with a different perspective.

A lot of times when we’re writing, we know out main characters much better than the others. After all, we are writing from their perspective and have been developing their unique voice. But when a secondary character drops in for a few scenes, we will want them to feel like a full and dynamic person.

Writing Exercise

Spend a few minutes rewriting a scene from the point of view of your secondary character from a first-person perspective. Think about what unique word choices they might use and where their sense of humor might come into play. Remember, that in your final piece your point-of-view must be consitant, but hopefully by doing this exercise, you are better able to incorporate your secondary character into your story.


In the end, vivid characters come from showing, not telling. Avoid lengthy exposition about a character’s history or personality traits. Instead, reveal who they are through their actions, dialogue, and relationships. Put them in scenes that test their morals, challenge their relationships, and force them to argue. Play with perspective shifts during your drafting process to gain insights. If you follow these tips, your characters will come to life on the page.

Now it’s your turn. Choose one of the exercises above and spend 15 minutes developing your protagonist. Let their voice emerge through dialogue and their true nature shine through moral dilemmas. Readers will be eager to follow them wherever the story leads. Share your results in the comments below! Thanks for writing with me. Subscribe to the blog or follow me on Facebook and Twitter for more prompts.

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How to Write A Setting With Personality

“The setting was like another character.” Have you ever heard someone describe a story this way? What is it that makes some settings feel alive, as if they were a person and not just a landscape? It takes more than just writing vivid description. Today, I’m sharing three ways to give your settings personality.

Setting is Responsive

My favorite instruction on writing setting comes from The Writer’s Notebook: Craft Essays from Tin House. In her essay, “Place” Dorothy Allison, author of Bastard Out of Caroline, shares what makes setting come alive for her.

I cannot abide a story told to me by a numb, empty voice that never responds to anything that’s happening, that doesn’t express some feeling in response to what it sees. Place is not just what your feet are crossing to get to somewhere. Place is feeling, and feeling is something a character expresses. More, it is something the writer puts on the page–articulates with deliberate purpose. If you keep giving me these eyes that note all the details–if you keep telling me the lawn is manicured but you don’t tell me that it makes your character both deeply happy and slightly anxious–then I’m a bit frustrated with you. I want a story that’ll pull me in. I want a story that makes me drunk. I want a story that feeds me glory. And most of all, I want a story that I can trust. I want a story that is happening in a real place, which means a place that has meaning and that evokes emotions in the person who’s telling me the story. Place is emotion.

Dorothy Allison, “Place”

In other words, in order for a place to feel like a character, the other characters should display an interactive relationship with it.

Allison goes on to say, “Place is where the ‘I’ goes. Place is what that ‘I’ looks at, what it doesn’t look at. Is it happy? Is it sad? Is it afraid? Is it curious?”

You have to know your main character’s personality well. This is especially important if you have a first-person narrator, since everything is being filtered through that character’s opinions.

Writing Prompt

In Allison’s essay, she makes a list of single lines of description that summarize her feelings toward various cities she’s visited. They are as follows:

  • Central Florida is despair.
  • New York City is sex.
  • California is smug.
  • Boston has never gotten over Henry James.
  • Seattle and Portland lie about their weather.
  • Iowa City is one hotel room and a chlorine stink away from the suburbs of hell.

Using Dorothy Allison’s sentences as a model, write single sentence descriptions that sum up the feelings you have about each of the cities and neighborhood where you have lived.

These lines make great opening sentences for stories or essays. Vladimir Nabokov began one of his short stories, “Spring in Fialta is cloudy and dull.”

Setting is Personified

So far we’ve talked about how characters react to settings, but sometimes settings have an agency of their own. In the following passage, Jeanette Winterson introduces the setting in the first chapter of her novel The Daylight Gate.

The Forest of Pendle used to be a hunting ground, but some say that the hill is the hunter—alive in its black-and-green coat cropped like an animal pelt. […]

There is still a tradition, or a superstition, that a girl-child born in Pendle Forest should be twice baptized; once in church and once in a black pool at the foot of the hill. The hill will know her then. She will be its trophy and its sacrifice. She must make her peace with her birthright, whatever that means.

Jeanette Winterson, The Daylight Gate

Notice how she describes the hill like a creature, wearing a coat cropped like an animal pelt. Then as we go on, the hill begins to act, not just look, like a living creature. It knows the girl, as much as she knows it.

When nonliving things are described as if they had the qualities of something alive, this is called personification.

In this particular novel, we might suspect that there is something supernatural or uncanny about this setting that is giving it its agency. But even if your setting’s personification is a mere metaphor, it can still be effective in making it more evocative to the reader.

Writing Prompt

Your setting is alive. Write a scene where the setting has a message that it wants to communicate to a human character. How does it get its message across? Also think about your human character’s emotional response to the situation.

Setting is Defamiliarized

There’s an old saying that it’s the job of a writer to make the ordinary feel strange and new. This is called defamiliarization. The passage below describes a place that many of you should be familiar with, but does it feel comfortable and ordinary?

If there is a river within a thousand miles of Riverside Drive, I saw no signs of it. It’s like every place else out there: endless scorched boulevards lined with one-story stores, shops, bowling alleys, skating rinks, taco drive-ins, all of them shaped not like rectangles but like trapezoids, from the way the roofs slant up from the back and the plateglass fronts slant out as if they’re going to pitch forwards on the sidewalk and throw up.

Tom Wolfe, The Kandy-Kolored Tangerine-Flake Streamline Baby

Here we have the suburban sprawl typical of southern California, but the description makes it feel anything but typical. Everything is slanted and irregularly shaped. The buildings are ready to vomit.

It is described in a way that makes the readers feel like they’re dizzy themselves. This isn’t just because of the word choice; the long run-on sentence is used intentionally to make the reader feel overwhelmed.

Whether or not the reader feels comfortable with your setting has nothing to with whether they know the place in real life. It’s all up to your words and sentence structure.

Writing Prompt

Write a scene where an alien visits a setting that is familiar to people living in the West in the 21st Century. It might be a supermarket, a highway, or a school. How does this setting feel outlandish, strange or unfamiliar to your character? What words and sentence structures capture this feeling?

The character doesn’t literally have to be a space alien. They could be an escaped circus animal, time traveler or anyone else you can imagine.

Wrapping Up

Now that we’ve learned about ways to give our setting personality, it’s time to think about how you might want to apply this information to your work in progress. You might want to double-check descriptions you’ve already written in your novel or memoir. Is it doing at least one of the following?

  • Showing something about your main character’s personality and how they relate to the world around them.
  • Creating a sense that the landscape is alive through its interactions with the human characters.
  • Disorienting readers with surprising word choices and sentence structures, giving them a sense of newness.

If it’s a “no” to all of the above, it may be that your setting is, pardon the pun, fading into the background. Revising with what you know now will make your setting an active character in its own right.

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How to Write A Gripping Opening Line

First impressions are everything. If you don’t hook your readers from the start, they might turn on Netflix or start doom-scrolling on Facebook. There are plenty of other things for people to do besides read your novel.

But don’t worry! Today we’ll learn how to find a hook for your novel so your readers won’t be able to put it down.

Examining Opening Lines

Let’s look at some opening sentences and see how they are working. I selected these by pulling famous novels off my husband’s bookshelf. In other words, I could have picked any number of well-regarded books and found opening lines that work similar ways.

Catch-22

It was love at first sight. The first time Yossarian saw the chaplain, he fell madly in love with him.

Catch-22 by Joseph Heller

The hook: This line begs the question: Why did Yossarian fall in love with the priest? Making the reader ask a question is always a good strategy for an opening line. It hooks the reader and makes them want to keep reading to see if they get an answer.

The tone: In addition, the idea of a man falling in love with a priest at first sight is humorous. This sets the silly tone of the rest of the novel. It is important that your opening line help establish the reader’s expectations about what kind of book they have chosen to read, even if the book later subverts some of the reader’s expectations, which Catch-22 certainly does.

The character: We are also being introduced to the character of Yossarian here. Generally the first person you see in a novel will be the main character. That may sound basic, but it’s important. There are exceptions to this, of course, but if you chose to begin with someone other than the main character, you need to write carefully so the reader can follow the transition.

The Golden Compass

Lyra and her daemon moved through the darkening halls, taking care to keep to one side, out of sight of the kitchen.

The Golden Compass by Philip Pullman

The hook: Here we see the main character sneaking through the hallway. This begs the question: why does she need to sneak? Right away we sense that there is a mystery afoot. The story begins in medias res, or in the middle of things. This means there is no exposition or introduction at the beginning of the story: we are thrown into the action right away.

The world: The fourth word in this sentence is “daemon.” This tells us right away that we are in a fantasy novel and sets the readers expectations accordingly.

The movement: It is significant that Lyra is not in a static position. She’s moving through the hallway. This movement makes the reader feel like they are getting pulled into the story. If Philip Pullman had started the novel a little later, we would see Lyra hiding and overhearing a conversation she’s not supposed to hear. Even though this would technically still be in medias res, it’s less gripping than seeing her in motion.

Gravity’s Rainbow

A screaming comes across the sky. It has happened before, but there is nothing to compare it to now.

Gravity’s Rainbow by Thomas Pynchon

The hook: There’s a big mystery here. What is this thing in the sky and why is it screaming? Why did it happen before and why is it happening now? Having this much mystery up front can be risky because it may alienate some readers. Make sure you introduce a character quickly to help ground them.

The movement: Once again we begin a story with movement, but this time it is the movement of an object across the entire skyline, rather than the movement of a single character that we saw earlier. This alone says a lot about the novel: it’s a big book about big ideas and takes a broad view of history. The movement of the large object across the large space is mimicking this.

The Devil Wears Prada

The light hadn’t even officially turned green at the intersection of 17th and Broadway before an army of yellow cabs roared past the tiny death trap I was attempting to navigate around the city streets. Clutch, gas, shift (neutral to first? or second?) release, clutch, I repeated over and over in my head…

The Devil Wears Prada by Lauren Weisberger

The Character: We learn a lot about the main character from these opening sentences. We learn she’s a frantic, anxiety-prone loser. Her struggle against traffic immediately establishes her as an underdog. Readers tend to love underdogs and want to root for them, especially if they find her anxieties and problems relatable.

The Movement: Once again, we are in motion. This time, we’re careening through the chaotic streets of New York City. We know this even though the city isn’t named because of the concrete pieces of description: the familiar street names combined with the yellow cabs and traffic. But importantly, this setting is done inside the act of driving. This allows the reader to feel like they are driving through New York City with the character.

Pumping Up Your Novel’s Opening Line

Now let’s apply what we’ve learned to our own opening lines. The following are general principles you can apply to begin your novel with a bang.

Add Movement

As we saw in our examples, keeping the readers in motion will draw them into the story. This is a great way for the writer to prove that they created a dynamic world, assuring the reader that the characters will experience change by the end of the story.

Act First, Explain Later

Don’t bog down the beginning with paragraphs of backstory. Begin with an intriguing scene and incorporate the necessary background in small doses throughout the first chapter.

Build an Iceberg

Remember Hemingway’s iceberg? A good writer doesn’t need to spell everything out for the readers. Instead, they give just enough information for the readers to use their own imagination. This is especially true in opening sentences, where some mystery or ambiguity can hook the reader.

Establish the Voice

The reader should get a hint at the general tone of the novel from the very beginning. Will it be a tender love story or a side-splitting satire? If you have a first-person narrator, you also have to give a hint at the character’s personality. Are they a hapless schmuck, like the narrator of The Devil Wears Prada, or are they are sardonic and bitter, like Holden Caulfield in Catcher in the Rye? In a first-person novel, the reader’s interest is often dependent on the strength of the narrator’s personality.

Wrapping Up

I suggest you take some of your favorite books off the shelves and examine their opening sentences. How many of them follow these rules? How many break them? Do you notice a difference between classic and contemporary novels?

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